This is pretty much how I imagine Sora on the down moments between missions. Yes, he has Goofy and Donald at his side, but I know he misses Riku and Kairi even more because of it.
There were a few things I noticed that pulled me out of the poem.
depht = depth
"separated from his friends" - The rest of the poem is in first person (Sora's perspective), so why is this sentence in third person: "his friends", and not "my friends"?
"listening to your whispers" - sounds as though the person whispering is nearby, which goes against the sense of him being alone. Maybe "listening to the memories", or "trying to hold onto your voice", something like this to indicate that who he's thinking about is far away.
"when we'll meet again" (when we will meet again) is a phrase that sounds out of place. Was it meant as a question: "when will we meet again"/"will we meet again"? "Will" is one of those hopeful verbs that doesn't require "when" to indicate a question of hope. As a statement, it would read instead, "when we meet again" to indicate certainty that the two individuals will meet up in the future eventually. I'm sorry if this explanation isn't very clear, but I'm running on 4 hours of sleep, and wished to comment on your work while the thoughts are fresh.
This is still a very good piece, especially with the screencap you have chosen. It touches on a side of Sora that many people might not notice because he usually goes through the day with a smile.
Thanks for pointing the mistakes out :3 I'll go back and fix them! I was half-asleep when I did this so i didn't notice them but now I do thanks ^^ and your explanation's clear ^^ i understand it yeah because then you forget what you were going to type that's happened to me.
You're welcome. ^-^ I like to give friendly critique when I can. Hehehe. I make an incredible amount of errors when I type half-asleep, so I know what that's like. Oh good, I really didn't sleep last night, so I was worried I wasn't making any sense. Hehe. I've had so many sentences where I started something, changed the end three times, and then forgot to fix the beginning.